Lovely things people have said about us
"Dan's notes were great - he helped us crack a fundamental issue with the pilot script, one that really unlocked the project for us. Hire him before he gets too expensive."
MD. Rockerdale Studios
"Dan is brilliant. His detailed notes, advice and general guidance have been of immense benefit to our writing. He spots flaws and plot-holes like a hawk, and is direct yet incredibly constructive in his feedback. He will help unlock your potential."
Luke Kelly & Alex Wilford
"This is the second time Dan has helped me with my script writing. Both times have been extremely insightful, cutting straight to the mechanics and highlighting the important considerations. Crucially, offering suggestions of how to fix the issues too. Dan is also very well connected, allowing for advice on what to do with your script when taking your head out of the trenches. Highly recommended.."
Writer, 'Brothers in Farms'
"I just wanted to thank you for your time helping me. I found your notes incredibly helpful, the information you provided on writing jokes really invaluable and it gave me a new appreciation and perspective."
TV comedy, drama and thriller writer
"Dan can follow logic in a sea of absurdity, and poke holes so precisely he should make Emmental cheese. He says he’ll make your script work hard for you, and he’s made ours work so hard they’ve lowered their cholesterol. Oh, and they’re much funnier!"
Tim Barnes & Simon Berry
Writers, 'The Tim & Simon sketch show'
"Your notes were concise, incisive and got to the heart of the issues with my script. You highlighted the areas that needed improving and gave helpful advice on how to move my script forward. You clearly know comedy and I would recommend your feedback to any budding sitcom writers."
BBC Comedy Writersroom winner, 2015
"Your insight and suggestions have helped our production greatly. We highly recommend your services."
Producer, Horrific Squid Productions
"I've just read your amazing and lovely feedback and am overwhelmed by the detail of it and how much you got it and enjoyed it! Amazing notes to help me develop it more before pitching it to channels ...your feedback really was exceptional and I'm gonna take it all on board for my next rewrite."
"Your reports were amazing"
Writer/Producer, Red Mist Scripts
"Thankyou so much for your excellent notes and kind words. Really useful thankyou!"
"The coverage on my sitcom pilot script was breathtakingly thorough. I'd highly recommend Why Did The Chicken's coverage for any aspiring or professional writer."
Founder, Short Game Productions
"You gave great feedback that was really helpful in progressing my script. They were insightful notes that helped me see my script in a different way, along with suggestions for how to move it forward and make it better."
"I was very sceptical about any script reading services, what could they provide that I couldn’t do myself? Well, you provided me with an in-depth analysis of my script and pinpointed problems that I had not even thought about. Not only that, you have given me ideas and direction in overcoming these problems. I recommend your services to anyone who wishes to move forward with their writing."
"Genuinely recommend very highly"
You provide excellent, thought through, clear and constructive feedback that focuses on building on the positives within a script to fix its problems and issues while keeping the identity of the idea. Highly recommended."
"Brilliant and incisive feedback which along with the helpful suggestions will make for a stronger script all-round. Cannot recommend this thoroughly professional service highly enough!"
"Daniel’s script notes resurrected for me a work that I had given up on after rejection by the BBC. Thanks to his life supporting ideas, the patient can be reworked and maybe appear in another guise, as a stage play perhaps. I had almost given up but Daniel’s enthusiasm for the better aspects of my script showed me it was not all bad and he had constructive criticism for its faults. All I need to do now is put the work in!”
"You got straight to the point of my script, really understood the characters, made many helpful suggestions and suggested further sources of help."
"Your incisive and considered feedback was just what we needed to assess the state of our script. It can be very hard to get useful, impartial opinions on your work but you completely understood the themes and atmosphere of the world we were trying to create while expertly highlighting aspects which could be improved."
"It was great to get some honest, constructive feedback with plenty of extremely helpful questions."
"Your notes have helped me understand where I could go with this, and got me to think of things I hadn't before."
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